By the time you've written the first few
paragraphs of your story or novel, you've already signed perhaps
the most important contract in a writer's life: your contract with
your reader. This term refers to the expectations that the
reader builds about the narrative that is about to unfold, and how
you as a writer fulfill or confound those expectations.
I don't advocate fulfilling every
expectation, nor defying them all, but rather understanding the
expectations you are likely creating, and making deliberate
choices about how to manage them to your ultimate conclusion. You
cannot control the mind of the reader, or what s/he brings to the
work, however, you can consider how the choices you make about the
work will influence that mind. It's said that the beginning
of your book sells that book, and the ending sells your next one:
you delivered a satisfying read, and they can't wait to see what
you're offering the next time.
The initial part of the contract may be
out of your hands. Your reader receives the work in a
pre-packaged form that is already building expectations. The
cover of the book or magazine, where and how the reader acquires
it, and whether they recognize the name of the author, editor or
publishing house are all factors in the mind of the reader.
Alas, while these aspects of the work form the reader's first
impressions, they are rarely under the author's control.
Opening Scene
The key aspect of the contract that
you're in charge of is the opening scene. Editors often make
the decision to reject on the first page or within the first
chapter. Part of the hook is the contract that you're
offering. Where does this book fit in the genre? What is the
tone of the book? What type of content will be found here?
What possibilities does this world allow or deny? If you
have not yet written the work, choose a starting scene that
showcases the excitement of the people and environment you are
bringing to life. We often think we should start carefully
and draw people in—but beware of overestimating the patience of
the reader.
Establishing Genre
Genre expectations are a big factor.
Fantasy readers like to enter into an alternate world with new
possibilities, and they will immediately be looking for the signs
that tell them what this world will be like. Your job as a
writer is to present that picture as clearly as possible.
What sub-genre does the story occupy and how is that signaled to
the reader? If they are forced to guess, or if they suddenly
find their guess contradicted, they get annoyed. Imagine you start
to read what feels like a sword-and-sorcery adventure, then the
lead characters are falling in love and the remainder of the plot
deals with their romantic conflicts, rather than the adventure
plot you were starting to enjoy. How would you feel as a
reader? Don't be that writer. If you want to blend
romance with your adventure, introduce that idea as early as
possible. Show the character's need for a life partner as
well as the need to defeat the villain. Weave these subplots
together in the narrative. Give both the inner and outer
conflicts sufficient weight.
The First Page
Consider that first page. What cues
can you give the reader to place the work as a romantic adventure?
A turn of phrase that calls romance to mind, a thought or remark
that shows the character's mindset? A moment shared between
the characters that builds interest in their relationship?
First Peek at Your Fantasy World
World-building expectations are the next
broad category. This is where you create the image of your
world for the reader, and begin to show what kinds of things can
happen. Don't think of this as a limitation on you, but
rather as determining the natural principles underlying your
creation, and where they intersect with your scenes. Is
there magic here? Will there be fantasy creatures in the
jungle? If you are writing in a contemporary setting, how
will the reader know that it is not simply mainstream? A
brief reference to the supernatural elements that will later be
significant could be all you need. You can use metaphor or
imagery to suggest the mystical even in a work that requires the
protagonist to be surprised by these things later. Keep in
mind that, thanks to the packaging—even if it's just your cover
letter or the guidelines of the 'zine you submit to—your reader is
not likely to be surprised.
Narrative Tone
Tone of the narrative is a more subtle
contract. Is the work satirical? Humorous? Serious?
Epic? Are your language choices supporting how you would
like the reader to feel?
Shock Level
The shock-level of your content is an
especially tricky concern. While readers who care about your
characters will follow them into many dark places, just as many
readers may be offended if your peaceful and light-hearted opening
leads to graphic sex or strong interpersonal violence. What
level of potentially offensive material will appear in the course
of the book? How will that material be presented to the
reader—as direct point of view, hearsay or off-stage action?
Clearly, you need to preserve your ability to incorporate shocking
material in a way that will appropriately surprise the reader, but
this need should be balanced with the desire of the reader to keep
turning pages.
The mystery and romance genres are
fortunate to have sub-genre categories that serve as rating
systems for the reader: the "cozy" mystery will not contain
shocking material, while the "spicy" romance is expected to raise
the heat level over the "sweet" version. We, alas, don't
have such distinctions. Dark fantasy is very popular, but
even then the levels of sex and violence may vary widely.
Be aware of the potentially offensive
material in your book and how quickly this material will be
revealed. The dark fantasy series I’m currently shopping
starts with a grim medieval childbirth scene. It's not for
the faint of heart, but it sets the reader's expectations
appropriately for the events that will follow. I would
rather a potential reader decide to put the book down early than
that they blog (and tweet and Amazon review) about their sense of
betrayal later on.
It may help to think of your opening as a
sort of "trailer" for the book to follow. Think about the
movie trailers you've seen that got you excited but failed to
capture the film. A great trailer might bring in the
crowds—but if word gets out that the film isn't anything like it,
the crowds dwindle quickly.
Short Stories
The contract for short stories is more
specific. They are often read in one sitting—strengthening
the association between the expectations and their fulfillment—and
their length implies that every word counts. You cannot have
a throwaway dialog to establish character if the topic under
discussion is not relevant to the story. Remember that old
saw about the gun over the mantelpiece needing to be fired by act
three? Your short story is like that stage set.
Everything you bring onto it must be there for a reason—at the
very least, the reader will assume that it is.
Do You Deliver?
Take another look at your opening, or
better yet, give the first few pages to a trusted reader and ask
him or her to describe what she'd expect to find if she keeps
reading. Is that the experience you deliver? If not,
are you confident of your choices—are you delivering something
that's still in keeping with what you've promised—or is this first
contract with your reader also likely to be your last?